How's everyone doing? Seems like a busy time for many of us at the moment. FlowersisBritish BetaPeter deimosmasque Will you have a chance to read and vote?
Hmm. You know, I asked someone about that and he said not to touch the horror elements. I think there's a right balance somewhere. I've a few things I want to do to this one yet before I call it "done" but I'm not sure what all of those things are now :PI think the horror elements of this might have been a bit too strong. Like it's a bit too legitimately frightening for the tone it ended up taking. It just makes the casual human connections formed at the end hit a bit off when in the back of my mind, I'm wondering why they're not all just running out the door. Other than that, this was really well done. Great job. I love the ending.
Sorry for lack of feedback, I tend to find it tough and get a little self conscious criticizing others. Anyway enough babble, here's my picks.
Hmm. You know, I asked someone about that and he said not to touch the horror elements. I think there's a right balance somewhere. I've a few things I want to do to this one yet before I call it "done" but I'm not sure what all of those things are now :P
In the longer version, they'll go into that last wing of the museum together and then get split up via cursed object. Guy will then have his chat with rat girl, and they'll come together in the end. I might introduce that one guy closing doors sooner, b ecuase that's a DnD curse Haru turned me onto and it's fucking amazing.
Fair. By that point it felt like they would have doubled down on sticking together, maybe. I'm not sure. I'll have to see how I feel on it in a month or two. Or a year since this is destined for a self-published collection and I dont' see myself churning one of those out anytime soon :PHonestly I kind of like how Alex didn't go to the final exhibit. It mixed things up nicely and it was a fun way for him to finally chat with the lady.